10-07-2006, 09:53 AM
Hey, MMCers! I have been working on a story that I would like to let yall read a bit of. This is just the first chapter below, and it is a rough copy of it. I am seeing if people like it before I really work to finish it.
I ask that you not be overly harsh. Do unto others, as you would have them do unto you. But don't be afraid to say if you don't like it.
It is going to be a easy read for kids of all ages. So you might wanna read it like a kid to have fun with it. Just tell me if you would want to read the rest of the book if all you got to read was the chapter below.
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Hello stranger! You look quite unusual for a human, I must say. You must be fully human. You see all the humans around here aren’t all human. They have a little bit of power in them, but I am sure a stranger like yourself does not want to hear about all this hullabaloo.
What is this place you ask? Well, my stranger friend, you are in the Main. You are in earth still, but you are not in earth. You are in the earth I know, and you are from the earth I don’t know. I bet you didn’t know that there were two earths. Well, I guess you are stupid! Don’t they teach of the other realms in your earth schools?
THEY DON’T? Well, that is a shame. The realms are amazing, and you are lucky to have the chance to come here. I don’t see hardly enough of humans from your earth. I see plenty of humans from my earth though. I here that humans from your earth kill! That is why I have never traveled to your earth. If humans kill each other, imagine what they would do to a dog like me!
There is no human killing human here. Death comes like in your earth, but it is natural. Health is of top concern, and because animals and humans work together, humans live longer as do the animals. And if you are one of them human killing humans, I suggest you not try and touch one of the humans here. They might hurt you.
You look quite bewildered. What is wrong with you? Is it my fur? Is it my home? I know I haven’t cleaned for many days, but you should be use to dirt because you have plenty of it on your face. So what is it, yungin’?
You have never seen a dog talk? Well, that is quite bewildering indeed. What have I done? You are a human from your earth, and dogs can only bark and woof there. Mother always told me “Bernadette, one day you are going to do something stupid, and bring shame to the family.” Look at me; I am talking to a human from your earth. I have shamed the family. Please don’t go back to your home, and tell people about how you talked to a dog. People are going to think you are strange.
I am honestly a good dog, and I am sorry that I scared you. I just sometimes get too ahead of myself, and plum forget to think. Now that you are completely frightened I am sure you want to leave. I will work on getting you back to your home and family as soon as I can.
No family, you say? I feel so bad for you, child, you are an orphan and I keep talking about families and home. You have no home or family to go back to, and I keep resting on the subject. Listen to me; I am shaming my family once again. I am so sorry child. Do you even want me to help you return to your earth?
Ok, then it is settled, you shall stay here with me. I will get you started in school, and I will begin making your more than human from your old earth. Let me just get you a name tag, and you will be set. Child, could you tell me your name?
Tractor, you have quite a silly name. But if it is what you want to be called, then that is what you shall be called. You can call me Bernadette, by the way. I am principal here at the School of the Mind, and head teacher of mind development at Rhinehorse School of Masters.
I teach humans and animals that have decided to focus on powers of the mind how to harness their powers. If their powers are harnessed early, they can become awesome and powerful. Mind is the hardest power to develop though, and it is my only power. Let me show you mind powers quickly. Let me just check the time because I am set for an appointment at the School of the Mind at 1:30.
1:55!!! Goodness, child, I have exhausted all my time plus some. I can’t leave you here since you are new to the land so I suppose you should come along with me. Just make sure you are quiet, and once the meeting is over we will get you started in school.
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The rest of the book is not going to be in this style, I just thought it would be a clever introduction.
I ask that you not be overly harsh. Do unto others, as you would have them do unto you. But don't be afraid to say if you don't like it.
It is going to be a easy read for kids of all ages. So you might wanna read it like a kid to have fun with it. Just tell me if you would want to read the rest of the book if all you got to read was the chapter below.
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Happy Introductions
Hello stranger! You look quite unusual for a human, I must say. You must be fully human. You see all the humans around here aren’t all human. They have a little bit of power in them, but I am sure a stranger like yourself does not want to hear about all this hullabaloo.
What is this place you ask? Well, my stranger friend, you are in the Main. You are in earth still, but you are not in earth. You are in the earth I know, and you are from the earth I don’t know. I bet you didn’t know that there were two earths. Well, I guess you are stupid! Don’t they teach of the other realms in your earth schools?
THEY DON’T? Well, that is a shame. The realms are amazing, and you are lucky to have the chance to come here. I don’t see hardly enough of humans from your earth. I see plenty of humans from my earth though. I here that humans from your earth kill! That is why I have never traveled to your earth. If humans kill each other, imagine what they would do to a dog like me!
There is no human killing human here. Death comes like in your earth, but it is natural. Health is of top concern, and because animals and humans work together, humans live longer as do the animals. And if you are one of them human killing humans, I suggest you not try and touch one of the humans here. They might hurt you.
You look quite bewildered. What is wrong with you? Is it my fur? Is it my home? I know I haven’t cleaned for many days, but you should be use to dirt because you have plenty of it on your face. So what is it, yungin’?
You have never seen a dog talk? Well, that is quite bewildering indeed. What have I done? You are a human from your earth, and dogs can only bark and woof there. Mother always told me “Bernadette, one day you are going to do something stupid, and bring shame to the family.” Look at me; I am talking to a human from your earth. I have shamed the family. Please don’t go back to your home, and tell people about how you talked to a dog. People are going to think you are strange.
I am honestly a good dog, and I am sorry that I scared you. I just sometimes get too ahead of myself, and plum forget to think. Now that you are completely frightened I am sure you want to leave. I will work on getting you back to your home and family as soon as I can.
No family, you say? I feel so bad for you, child, you are an orphan and I keep talking about families and home. You have no home or family to go back to, and I keep resting on the subject. Listen to me; I am shaming my family once again. I am so sorry child. Do you even want me to help you return to your earth?
Ok, then it is settled, you shall stay here with me. I will get you started in school, and I will begin making your more than human from your old earth. Let me just get you a name tag, and you will be set. Child, could you tell me your name?
Tractor, you have quite a silly name. But if it is what you want to be called, then that is what you shall be called. You can call me Bernadette, by the way. I am principal here at the School of the Mind, and head teacher of mind development at Rhinehorse School of Masters.
I teach humans and animals that have decided to focus on powers of the mind how to harness their powers. If their powers are harnessed early, they can become awesome and powerful. Mind is the hardest power to develop though, and it is my only power. Let me show you mind powers quickly. Let me just check the time because I am set for an appointment at the School of the Mind at 1:30.
1:55!!! Goodness, child, I have exhausted all my time plus some. I can’t leave you here since you are new to the land so I suppose you should come along with me. Just make sure you are quiet, and once the meeting is over we will get you started in school.
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The rest of the book is not going to be in this style, I just thought it would be a clever introduction.