01-07-2007, 02:22 AM
ok, this is my story, it takes place in a kind of modern time, hope you enjoy
btw this is my first attempt at a story, so im open for constructive critisism and praise, and i will be ok with any critisism
oh yeah
warning! this story contains language that may offend some readers! some scenes may be a bit too violent for some people, but i doubt that
btw this is my first attempt at a story, so im open for constructive critisism and praise, and i will be ok with any critisism
oh yeah
warning! this story contains language that may offend some readers! some scenes may be a bit too violent for some people, but i doubt that
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The Neralie have initiated their plan to take over the world. They have the weaponry and firepower to do this, but do they have the Brains to pull it off?
The Neralie have the brains…they have the power…they have the will…what will stand in their way?
Nothing…at the moment…For no-one knew that the Neralie were even planning world domination.
Can anyone discover their plans and stop them from taking over the world?
Can anyone gather the force to stop them?
Or shall the world fall into the Neralie’s hands and be turned into a world of pain, suffering and misery…
Read on and find out if the Neralie will be stopped…or if the world becomes the Neralie’s playpen…
Chapter 1
Erik woke to the sound of gunfire outside his cabin. “What’s going on out there?” wondered Erik to himself. Erik steeped out the door to find a mind clutching his chest staggering towards him. “Help me…please” said the man as he stumbled slightly. “What happened?” asked Erik. “The…Neralie…they are…coming…” gasped the man. “Here, let me get you inside and onto the couch” said Erik as he picked up the man and carried him inside. “Thank…you” said the man. “Quiet, save your strength for fighting to save yourself” said Erik.
“Thank you for saving my life. I am in your debt” said the man. “Don’t worry about it man, you don’t owe me anything, just forget your debt, I was only helping a fellow man in need” said Erik. “Now, I never got around to telling you my name, I’m Erik, and you are?” asked Erik. “My name is Scott, nice to meet you” said Scott as he stood up and shook Erik’s hand. “Now you said something about the Neralie?” asked Erik. “Oh yes! I managed to stumble upon their scouting party, they were planning on taking over the town to start of their world domination plan!” said Scott, suddenly very excited. “Shit! We have to warn the president and get an army ready!” said Erik. “Look. We need to get weapons, provisions and set up some sort of transport, the Neralie have cut off all air transport” said Scott, sounding very much like an army officer. “Well we have to go by foot then…” said Erik. “What? Don’t you have any friends who can give us a lift?” asked Scott.”…let’s put it simply…I don’t have any friends, that’s what happens when you grow up alone…” said Erik sadly. “Oh my god…I…I don’t know what to say…it feels like it’s my fault or something…” said Scott slowly. “Hey, it wasn’t your fault, it was my parents who left me when I was 13, I had friends when I was 5 or so…but after they left…I just lost connection with the world...” said Erik softly. “All right then, starting from now, I’ll stick with you till we find your parents” said Scott. “Are you serious? Would you really stick with me until I found my parents?” asked Erik. “Yes. I will. But first we have the Neralie to warn the president about, we will need guns, and ammo” said Scott. “um…we don’t need to worry about that, I kind of have a huge store in the back from when I used to jump soldiers and steal their food…” said Erik, his face going red. “Hahaha all right then lets go stop a war” said Scott as he and Erik went out to the back to get weaponry.
The Neralie have initiated their plan to take over the world. They have the weaponry and firepower to do this, but do they have the Brains to pull it off?
The Neralie have the brains…they have the power…they have the will…what will stand in their way?
Nothing…at the moment…For no-one knew that the Neralie were even planning world domination.
Can anyone discover their plans and stop them from taking over the world?
Can anyone gather the force to stop them?
Or shall the world fall into the Neralie’s hands and be turned into a world of pain, suffering and misery…
Read on and find out if the Neralie will be stopped…or if the world becomes the Neralie’s playpen…
Chapter 1
Erik woke to the sound of gunfire outside his cabin. “What’s going on out there?” wondered Erik to himself. Erik steeped out the door to find a mind clutching his chest staggering towards him. “Help me…please” said the man as he stumbled slightly. “What happened?” asked Erik. “The…Neralie…they are…coming…” gasped the man. “Here, let me get you inside and onto the couch” said Erik as he picked up the man and carried him inside. “Thank…you” said the man. “Quiet, save your strength for fighting to save yourself” said Erik.
“Thank you for saving my life. I am in your debt” said the man. “Don’t worry about it man, you don’t owe me anything, just forget your debt, I was only helping a fellow man in need” said Erik. “Now, I never got around to telling you my name, I’m Erik, and you are?” asked Erik. “My name is Scott, nice to meet you” said Scott as he stood up and shook Erik’s hand. “Now you said something about the Neralie?” asked Erik. “Oh yes! I managed to stumble upon their scouting party, they were planning on taking over the town to start of their world domination plan!” said Scott, suddenly very excited. “Shit! We have to warn the president and get an army ready!” said Erik. “Look. We need to get weapons, provisions and set up some sort of transport, the Neralie have cut off all air transport” said Scott, sounding very much like an army officer. “Well we have to go by foot then…” said Erik. “What? Don’t you have any friends who can give us a lift?” asked Scott.”…let’s put it simply…I don’t have any friends, that’s what happens when you grow up alone…” said Erik sadly. “Oh my god…I…I don’t know what to say…it feels like it’s my fault or something…” said Scott slowly. “Hey, it wasn’t your fault, it was my parents who left me when I was 13, I had friends when I was 5 or so…but after they left…I just lost connection with the world...” said Erik softly. “All right then, starting from now, I’ll stick with you till we find your parents” said Scott. “Are you serious? Would you really stick with me until I found my parents?” asked Erik. “Yes. I will. But first we have the Neralie to warn the president about, we will need guns, and ammo” said Scott. “um…we don’t need to worry about that, I kind of have a huge store in the back from when I used to jump soldiers and steal their food…” said Erik, his face going red. “Hahaha all right then lets go stop a war” said Scott as he and Erik went out to the back to get weaponry.
im still trying to think of a name for it, im always good at these things, but it may take awhile next chapter!!