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This is a story to go w/the RP seen here (its new!)
PS: This is my first Fanfic, praise and criticism would be appreciated

http://mountmoon.net/showthread.php?tid=2692

To see the backstory, go to the RP thread.

Each chapter will be made up of 3-5 Sections

Chapter 1, Section 1
Intro: James has just made camp off the Coast of Salor, and is waiting for Charles, his friend.

"Where is he?" James asked himself. As a Commander of the Element back home in Opae, he was used to being answered immediatly. He heard rumblings in the bush behind him, and quickly turned around. A small Etez stepped out. James remembered his commitment to Professor Avella "Fill out that pokedex for me, and remember, thats the only reason you're there." He quickly initiated a battle by calling out his Turtwig. The Etez was light blue with dark blue stripes, and it used bubble. Turtwig, being a Grass type, took little damage. But before James and Turtwig could attack, the Etez was gone.

~End of Chapter 1, Section 1~

Chapter 1, Section 2
Intro: James has just seen a glimpse of what is in store at Salor

"Wha... What else is in store here?" James wondered to himself. He looked around, still at any moment hoping to see Charlie coming in on his speedboat. Instead, he heard increasingly louder rustlings and movements in the bushes. After about a minute, three figures jumped out of the lush forest.

"We are members of Team Torrent, the residents of Salor. Join us, or we will destroy you,"
One of the mysterious people said. James had heard of Torrent, specificly what horrible attrocities they committed to pokemon.

"So, what will you do?" One of the Torrent members asked.

~End of Chapter 1, Section 2~

don't double post. Yes, it's good! I loved it! ^^ can't wait to hear more

.... It's okay.... I really do think that you need to be more descriptive, but that's just me XD

Wow. I thought that know one posted in this, and that it was dead. Sorry for double posting. Also, I'll try to be more descriptive. Keep up the comments!!!

Ch1, Sec.2 Con't:

"U-uh" James stammered, not sure of what to do. But just then, in the nick of time, he saw a speedboat docking right next to the one he came in. Without a word to the Torrent members, he silently slid over to Charlie, who had just come off the boat. In whispers, James told Charlie all about what had happened, about the Etrez, and the Torrent members. Charlie, always the quick thinker, came up with an idea. "Remember what Jake always used to do?" Charlie said. "Well, just talk your way out of it."
"U-uh" James said.
"So... what?" The Torrent Member said.
"NOOOOO!!!!" Charlie blurted out. After he said it, he clamped his hand over his mouth.


What will happen next? Tune in to find out!